That Character Fixed

Monday, October 17th, 2011

Mr. Edgar Allan Poe

Author

Boston, Massachusets, U.S.A.

Mr. Poe,

There is always a character of a book you are reading or have read, that you dislike, and that character for me is the murderer on the short story written by you named "The Tell Tale Heart". To begin, "The Tell Tale Heart" is a short story that you first published in 1843, and it follows and unnamed narrator that insists on his sanity after committing a murder to an old man with a "vulture eye". The murder is extremely calculated, so much that with no trouble it was almost impossible for the police to catch him. After the murder, the murderer dismembered the body and hid the parts under the floorboards.

Well, I dislike the murderer´s character for many reasons, but one of the most important is the way he kills the old man when he is absolutely with no power of fighting back. The old man with the vulture eye is completely unaware of what is going on. I like a good old book murder, but for some reason, or maybe because of the character I didn´t enjoy this one. Also, the whole process the murderer made before the murder indeed got me all confused and disappointed. He used to go to the old man´s room every night, for seven nights, but he described that he wasn´t able to kill him because he didn´t hate the old man, just his eye, and the eye was closed. But on the eighth night he sees the eye opened and showing his clouded, pale blue colour and kills him.

The murderer also insists on his sanity even after the murder when just by committing murder and dismembering someone is enough proof that you are not sane. He keeps insisting on it, and uses the excuse that the plan was so good and controlled that an insane person wouldn´t be able to make it. The murderer continues with his insanity and because of it he develops a disease, which is increased by nervousness too. The sickness is called "over-acuteness of the senses". Because of the "disease", the murderer believes in the hallucination of the old man´s beating heart, under the floorboards, he listens to the beats so loud and clear he comes forward to the cops.

Mr. Poe, I do believe you are a master for writing, but let me tell you that this character is the exception to the rule. I didn’t like his craziness and the stupid way he surrenders to the cops. It is quite insulting that the whole process was so elaborate and in the end he just surrenders. Don’t get this the wrong way, I’m just a fan who would love to read about more developed endings.

Yours truly,

Rob Cordón

Review

(date in a formal format)

(Mr. Edgar Allan Poe)

(Occupation)

(City, country)

(Mr. Poe,)

There is always a character of a book you are reading or have read, that you dislike, and that character for me is the murderer on the short story written by Edgar Allan Poe (you) named "The Tell Tale Heart". To begin, "The Tell Tale Heart" is a short story that was(you) first published in 1843, and it follows and unnamed narrator that insists on his sanity after committing a murder(,) to an old man with a "vulture eye". The murder is extremely calculated(,) so much that with no trouble it was almos(almost) impossible for the police to catch him(,)(.) after(After) ther(the) murder(,) the murderer dismembered the body and hid the parts under the floorboards.

Well, I dislike the murderer´s character for many reasons, but one of the most important is the way he kills the old man(,) when he is absolutely with no power of fighting back(,)(.) the(The) old man with the vulture eye in(is) completely unaware of what is going on. I like a good old book murder, but for some reason, or maybe because of the character I didn´t enjoy this one. Also, the whole process the murderer made before the murder indeed (got me all confused and disappointed). He used to go to the old man´s room every night, for seven nights, but he described that he wasn´t able to kill him because he didn´t hate the old man, just his eye, and the eye was closed. But on the eighth night he sees the eye opened and showing his clouded, pale blue colour and kills him.

The murderer also insists on his sanity even after the murder(,) when just by committing murder and dismembering (someone) it´s(is) know(enough proof) that you are not sane(,)(.) he(He) keeps insisting on it, and uses the excuse that the plan was to(so) good and controlled that an insane person wouldn´t be able to make it. The murderer continues with his insanity and because of it he develops a disease, which is developed(increased) by nervousness(,) too(,)(.) the(The) sickness it´s(is) called "over-acuteness of the senses". Because of the "disease(,)" the murder(murderer) believes in the hallucination of the old man´s beating heart, under the floorboards, he listens to the beats so loud and clear he comes forward to the cops.

(Mr. Poe, I do believe you are a master for writing, but let me tell you that this character is the exception to the rule. I didn’t like his craziness and the stupid way he surrenders to the cops. It is quite insulting that the whole process was so elaborate and in the end he just surrenders. Don’t get this the wrong way, I’m just a fan who would love to read about more developed endings.)

(Yours truly,

Your name)

That Character

There is always a character of a book you are reading or have read, that you dislike, and that character for me is the murderer on the short story written by Edgar Allan Poe named "The Tell Tale Heart". To begin, "The Tell Tale Heart" is a short story that was first published in 1843, and it follows and unnamed narrator that insists on his sanity after committing a murder, to an old man with a "vulture eye". The murder is extremely calculated so much that with no trouble it was almos impossible for the police to catch him, after ther murder the murderer dismembered the body and hid the parts under the floorboards.

Well, I dislike the murderer´s character for many reasons, but one of the most important is the way he kills the old man, when he is absolutely with no power of fighting back, the old man with the vulture eye in completely unaware of what is going on. I like a good old book murder, but for some reason, or maybe because of the character I didn´t enjoy this one. Also, the whole process the murderer made before the murder indeed. He used to go to the old man´s room every night, for seven nights, but he described that he wasn´t able to kill him because he didn´t hate the old man, just his eye, and the eye was closed. But on the eighth night he sees the eye opened and showing his clouded, pale blue colour and kills him.

The murderer also insists on his sanity even after the murder, when just by committing murder and dismembering it´s know that you are not sane, he keeps insisting on it, and uses the excuse that the plan was to good and controlled that an insane person wouldn´t be able to make it. The murderer continues with his insanity and because of it he develops a disease, which is developed by nervousness, too, the sickness it´s called "over-acuteness of the senses". Because of the "disease" the murder believes in the hallucination of the old man´s beating heart, under the floorboards, he listens to the beats so loud and clear he comes forward to the cops.

Paper 2 Activity 6

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Can Money Buy Happiness?

To begin, I have to say that when money is at your disposition, a lot of things become easier just by having money, and I know everybody agrees with that because for example when your body needs food, when you need to eat, you have to buy something to please that need because it is nor a desire, it goes further than that, it is a need. So you buy food, that way you become satisfied. Another point of view is the way we live now; there is nothing you could do without money, even to play sports you need money, to get the needed stuff to play.

But, what does money mean? The actual definition of money is: money is any object or record that is generally accepted as payment for goods and services and payment of debt in any given country or socio-economic context. This concept means that money is the thing that makes you get products at any place, and services of any kind, and with money you make the payment of any debt that you have.

The question that has been made to me, "Can Money Buy Happiness?", is something a lot of people have wondered, but to know the answer to that, first we must know, what happiness means, as there are many kinds of happiness. Happiness is considered to be the mental state of well-being characterized by positive emotions ranging from contentment to intense joy. It means that whenever you are enjoying something, even the tiniest thing, you are happy.

Using the definition of happiness that says that all we need is the "mental state of well-being", I believe that we don’t need money to get to the state of happiness. You could be happy by anything that happens around you, on the environment, even if that "thing" is not about you. I can give you all kind of dumb examples that I´m sure you can relate to. When you think you lost something that you liked or that you needed to do something, even just a pen, when you find that which you are looking for, you get excited, and for a moment you become happy; when you are playing any sport, take soccer, if you score a goal you get happy, just by the fact that it is something good for you; an example that is not about you could be, when a loved one tells you he has a job interview or that he could get something, you truly hope he does, and when he tells you he did, you get happy for him.

So to answer the question "Can Money Buy Happiness?" I say no. To be happy you don’t need any kind of payment.

Review

To begin, I have to say that when money is at your disposition, a lot of things become easier(,) just by having money, and I know everybody agrees with that(,) because for example when your body needs food, when you need to eat, you have to buy something to please that need(,) because it is nor a desire, it goes further than that, it is a need. So you buy food, that way you become satisfied. Another point of view(,) is that the way we live now(,)(;) there is nothing you could do without money, even to play sports you need money, to get the needed stuff to play.

But, what does money means(mean)? The actual definition of money is: money is any object or record that is generally accepted as payment for goods and services and payment of debt in any given country or socio-economic context. This concept means(,) that money is the thing that makes you get products at any place, and services of any kind, and with money you make the payment of any debt that you have.

The question that has been made to me, "Can Money Buy Happiness?", is something a lot of people have wondered, but to now(know) the answer to that, first we must know, what happiness means, as there are many kinds of happiness. Happiness is considered to be the mental state of well-being characterized by by positive emotions ranging from contentment to intense joy. It means that whenever you are enjoying something, even the tiniest thing, that could make you (are) happy.

Using the definition of happiness(,) that says that all we need is the "mental state of well-being", I believe that we dont(don’t) need money to get to the state of happiness. You could be happy by anything that happens around you, on the enviroment(environment), even if that "thing" is not about you. To(I can) give you all kind of dumb examples(,) that Im(I´m) sure you can relate to(:)(.) When you think you lost something that you liked or that you needed to do something, even just a pen, when you find that which you are looking for, you get excited, and for a moment you become happy; when you are playing any sport, take soccer, if you score a goal you get happy, just by the fact that (it) is something good for you; an example that is not about you could be, when a loved one tells you he has a job interview or that he could get something, you truly hope he does, and when he tells you he did, you get happy for him.

So to answer the question "Can Money Buy Happiness?" I say no. To be happy you dont(don’t) need any kind of payment.

Can Money Buy Happiness?

To begin, I have to say that when money is at your disposition, a lot of things become easier, just by having money, and I know everybody agrees with that, because for example when your body needs food, when you need to eat, you have to buy something to please that need, because it is nor a desire, it goes further than that, it is a need. So you buy food, that way you become satisfied. Another point of view, is that the way we live now, there is nothing you could do without money, even to play sports you need money, to get the needed stuff to play.

But, what does money means? The actual definition of money is: money is any object or record that is generally accepted as payment for goods and services and payment of debt in any given country or socio-economic context. This concept means, that money is the thing that makes you get products at any place, and services of any kind, and with money you make the payment of any debt that you have.

The question that has been made to me, "Can Money Buy Happiness?", is something a lot of people have wondered, but to now the answer to that, first we must know, what happiness means, as there are many kinds of happiness. Happiness is considered to be the mental state of well-being characterized by by positive emotions ranging from contentment to intense joy. It means that whenever you are enjoying something, even the tiniest thing, that could make you happy.

Using the definition of happiness, that says that all we need is the "mental state of well-being", I believe that we dont need money to get to the state of happiness. You could be happy by anything that happens around you, on the enviroment, even if that "thing" is not about you. To give you all kind of dumb examples, that Im sure you can relate to: When you think you lost something that you liked or that you needed to do something, even just a pen, when you find that which you are looking for, you get excited, and for a moment you become happy; when you are playing any sport, take soccer, if you score a goal you get happy, just by the fact that is something good for you; an example that is not about you could be, when a loved one tells you he has a job interview or that he could get something, you truly hope he does, and when he tells you he did, you get happy for him.

So to answer the question "Can Money Buy Happiness?" I say no. To be happy you dont need any kind of payment.

Paper 2 Activity 5

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Debate Speech Fixed

Dear Fellow Students/Debaters

I happen to know there have been going on a debate, concerning the fast food, and weather it should be forbidden for young people under 18 years old or not. I believe that what you´re doing must be for the health of the youngers because of effects that fast food has on their bodies and on their well being. The food that is now growing all around the world might look really tasty and appealing, but so you know it contains a wealth of hidden hazards which are very dangerous when they are eaten in large amounts, and they are a major cause of obesity, especially in children.

Everything that a fast food meal contains is processed, just like processed potatoes, processed eggs and milk products, as well as hydrogenated vegetable oil, saturated fats, gums, sugar substitutes, and lots of other products, that taste good just because the people add herbs and spices. They also contain artificial colours and preservatives and some artificial flavouring which complete the unhealthy package.

The damage that fast food can create is incredible when they are consumed on a regular basis, and almost everyone is doing that. Families work, and they don’t rely on someone to make a meal in a conventional way of cooking with fresh ingredients. I know they are really tasty, I have eaten some myself, but I also eat fresh veggies and fruits, because I know that when your diet lacks of this fresh food, your intake of essential nutrients that are derived from these sources is almost zero. Also, your intake of dietary fiber is so low that could go to nonexistent. What you make to your body with fast food and no fresh food is this:
                              - Raise your blood pressure
                              - Increase the levels of cholesterol
                              - Retard your metabolic rate
                              - Weaken you immune system
                              - Destabilize your sugar levels
                              - Reduce the ability of your colon to function the right way

So in conclusion, fast food makes your body function the wrong way, and it could be deadly. But what I think is that you shouldn´t forbid the fast food to the people younger than 18 years, what we should do is create conscience on them, so they could know that they can eat fast food, once in a while, but that they need fresh ingredients on their bodies so they can work the way they are intended.

Thank for your attention.

Review

Dear Fellow Students/Debaters

I happen to know there have been going on a debate, concerning the fast food, and weather it should be forbidden for young people under 18 years old (or not). I believe that what you´re doing must be for the health of the youngers(,) because of the efects(effects) that fast food has on their bodies and on their well being. They(The) food that is now growing all around the world(,) might look really tasty and appealing, but so you know it contains a wealth of hidden heath hazzards(hazards) wich(which) are very dangerous when they are eaten in large amounts, and they are a major cause of obesity, especially in children.

Everything that a fast food (meal) contains is processed, just like processed potatoes, processed eggs and milk products, as well as hydrogenated vegetable oil, saturated fats, gums, sugar substitutes, and lots of other products, that taste good just becasue(because) the people add herbs and spices. They also contain artificial colours and preservatives and some artificial flavouring(.) That the (which) complete (the) unhealthy package.

The damage that fast food can create is incredible(,) when they are consumed on a regular basis, and almost everyone is doing that. Families work, and they dont(don’t) rely on someone to make a meal(,) (in) a conventional way of cooking with fresh ingredients. I know they are really tasty, I have eaten some myself, but I also eat fresh veggies and fruits, because I know that when your diet lack(lacks) of this fresh food, your intake of essential nutrients that are derived from these sources is almos(almost) zero. Also, your intake of dieatary(dietary) fiber is so low that could go to nonexistent. What you make to your body with fast food and no fresh food is this:
                              - Raise your blood pressure
                              - Increase the levels of colesterol(cholesterol)
                              - Retard your metabolic rate
                              - Weaken you inmune(immune) system
                              - Destabilize your sugar levels
                              - Reduce the hability(ability) of your colon to function the right way

So in conclusion, fast food makes your body function the wrong way, and it could be deadly. But what I think is that you shouldn´t forbidd(forbid) the fast food to the people younger than 18 years, what we should do is create conscience on them, so they could know that they can eat fast food, once in a while, but that they need fresh ingredients on their body(bodies) so it(they) could(can) work the way it(they) is(are) intended.

Thank for your attention.

Debate Speech

Dear Fellow Students/Debaters

I happen to know there have been going on a debate, concerning the fast food, and weather it should be forbidden for young people under 18 years old. I believe that what you´re doing must be for the health of the youngers, because of the efects that fast food has on their bodies and on their well being. They food that is now growing all around the world, might look really tasty and appealing, but so you know it contains a wealth of hidden heath hazzards wich are very dangerous when they are eaten in large amounts, and they are a major cause of obesity, especially in children.

Everything that a fast food contains is processed, just like processed potatoes, processed eggs and milk products, as well as hydrogenated vegetable oil, saturated fats, gums, sugar substitutes, and lots of other products, that taste good just becasue the people add herbs and spices. They also contain artificial colours and preservatives and some artificial flavouring. That the complete unhealthy package.

The damage that fast food can create is incredible, when they are consumed on a regular basis, and almost everyone is doing that. Families work, and they dont rely on someone to make a meal, a conventional way of cooking with fresh ingredients. I know they are really tasty, I have eaten some myself, but I also eat fresh veggies and fruits, because I know that when your diet lack of this fresh food, your intake of essential nutrients that are derived from these sources is almos zero. Also, your intake of dieatary fiber is so low that could go to nonexistent. What you make to your body with fast food and no fresh food is this:
                              - Raise your blood pressure
                              - Increase the levels of colesterol
                              - Retard your metabolic rate
                              - Weaken you inmune system
                              - Destabilize your sugar levels
                              - Reduce the hability of your colon to function the right way

So in conclusion, fast food makes your body function the wrong way, and it could be deadly. But what I think is that you shouldn´t forbidd the fast food to the people younger than 18 years, what we should do is create conscience on them, so they could know that they can eat fast food, once in a while, but that they need fresh ingredients on their body so it could work the way it is intended.

Thank for your attention.

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New Club

Mr. Juan 

Principal

Rainhardt School  

Mr. Juan

I wanted to address to you with a suggestion that will hopefully be considered. Since I know that the school wanted to expand its range of student clubs, I have been thinking about one in particular. I think you should create a reading club for students. The students involved would read books for fun, and not just because they have to. Every couple of weeks it would be a different book, but books which can be chosen by students because if the school chooses the books, most guys, just by that fact, wouldn’t read any of them. So the club would be a student reading club, indeed. The books that will be read in the club, will be discussed by the members, and every member can recommend books so that everyone choses one. To create a club like this will involve some things but believe me when I say there will be more benefits to be thankful for.

The reading club comes from the initiative of the students that would like to be involve in this club. They enjoy reading books, but they would like to expand their range of knowledge and their reading habit, making more use of it. They would also like to have new options of books that they can read, just like I said before, the books will be chosen by the students. I know I say on behalf of all students tha enjoy reading that creating this reading club will be a great way to be involve on an extracurricular activty.

I leave you with this suggestion that will hopefully be into account. I would really like to be part of a reading club for students that could be directed by the students. Just like I said before, it could be helpful. Principal, I know that some student are excited by the possibility that this reading club could be made.
Thank you for the consideration,

Sincerily,

Roberto José Cordón Zuñiga

Review

(Date in a formal manner)

(Mr. xxxxxxxxxxxxx

Principal

Name of school

City and country)

Dear Principal(Mr. xxxxxxxxx),

I wanted to address to you with a suggestion(,) that will hopefully be considered. Since I know that the school wanted to expand its range of stundet(student) clubs, I have been thinking about one in particular. I think you should create a reading club(,) for students. The students involved would read books for fun, and not just because they have to. Every couple of weeks (it) would be a different book, but books which can be choosen(chosen) by students(.) Because, (because) if the school choose(chooses) the books, must(most) guys, just by that fact, wouldnt(wouldn’t) read any of them. So the club would be a student reading club, indeed. The books that will be read in the club, will be discussed by the members, and every member can recomend(recommend) books so that everyone chose(choses) one. (To create a club like this will involve some things but believe me when I say there will be more benefits to be thankful for.)

The reading club, will not only work as a hobbie, but it can help the students have a new habit of reading, that can ultimatly help us. By reading books, the reader becomes more educated, and wins a wide range of knowledge. The habit that this club would create will also help the students to do a schedule, for their reading. The reading can also help the students have a better study hability and attitude, something that everybody could get better at.

What I would like you to think about, if you are considering making the new reading club, is that it could have an average space on the library, so that the students could know that it can help them and that its not only quiet but it is also great getting lost on the stories told by the author of the book that is being read. The books that can be read at the club will change, and of course, the students will read every kind of book, just like comedy books, novels, poems, biographies and autobiographies, and so much more.

I leave you with this suggestion(,) that will hopefully be taking(taken) into acount(account). I would really like to be part of a reading club for students(,) that could be directioned(directed) by the students. Just like I said before, it could be helpful. Principal, I know that some student are excited by the possibility that this reading club could be made.

Thank you for the consideration,

Sincerily,

Trooper(formal letters require formal names)

New Club

Dear Principal,

I wanted to address to you with a suggestion, that will hopefully be considered. Since I know that the school wanted to expand  its range of stundet clubs, I have been thinking about one in particular. I think you should create a reading club, for students. The students involved would read books for fun, and not just because they have to. Every couple of weeks would be a different book, but books which can be choosen by students. Because, if the school choose the books, must guys, just by that fact, wouldnt read any of them. So the club would be a student reading club, indeed. The books that will be read in the club, will be discussed by the members, and every member can recomend books so that everyone chose one.

The reading club, will not only work as a hobbie, but it can help the students have a new habit of reading, that can ultimatly help us. By reading books, the reader becomes more educated, and wins a wide range of knowledge. The habit that this club would create will also help the students to do a schedule, for their reading. The reading can also help the students have a better study hability and attitude, something that everybody could get better at.

What I would like you to think about, if you are considering making the new reading club, is that it could have an average space on the library, so that the students could know that it can help them and that its not only quiet but it is also great getting lost on the stories told by the author of the book that is being read. The books that can be read at the club will change, and of course, the students will read every kind of book, just like comedy books, novels, poems, biographies and autobiographies, and so much more.

I leave you with this suggestion, that will hopefully be taking into acount. I would really like to be part of a reading club for students, that could be directioned by the students. Just like I said before, it could be helpful. Principal, I know that some student are excited by the possibility that this reading club could be made.

Thank you for the consideration,
Sincerily

Trooper

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Trouble With The IB?

Dear Friend,

How you doing, man? I hope you're fine. I have been hearing that you have flunked some of your school classes, and I understand it is because of your band. I know you are a great singer and guitarist, but somehow that has affected your school focus. I know you got new material and that you have done some great music, but it is not helping you on school, and just to be clear, I am not telling you to stop doing music, and to separate from your band, actually is nothing like that. I just happen to know that this is affecting your scores on the ib program and i just wanted to give some piece of advice.

You have been giving more time and attention to your band, making new songs, writing new lyrics, making arrengements of your old songs, creating melodies, and giving shows. And that makes you give no attention at all to your school, to your classes, and you are flunking them, man. I know you are really smart but you are just too lazy, you could win your classes with almost no effort at all, but instead of doing it, you let it lose and don't care. I know you want to graduate and don't repeat the senior year. You used to be really good at math, you even taught me some stuff I didn't understood, but now I do because of you. You weren't that great in your other classes, but you never flunked them.

You don't have to quit to your band, or just saty focused on your school, what you need is a schedule, becasue with some time for everything I know you can do it so much better, and that way you won't flunk your classes and worry your mom. Just ornganize, with time to study, to do homework, even if it's boring, and with time, for sure, to practice with your band, and I am sure if you do this, you won't have to sneak out you house to go practice, I bet you if you do this that your mom will let you practice in your own garage.

So with this I let you make the decision, but I hope you just listen to any one. Just follow some advice and you will go on with your school and with your band, and I know you will go far and further. So, I'll be seeing you, man. And I'm still waiting for your invitation to your shows, man. Hope you do great, both with your band and with your classes. We will keep talking.

Your friend,
Trooper

Review

Date in an informal manner

Dear xxxxx,

Paragraph 1: (Greetings, sentence bla bla bla, sentence bla bla bla, sentence bla, bla, bla. I'm writing because I heard that (problem??????) and this is affecting your scores in the IB program so I wan to give you some advice.)

Paragraph 2: (Stating the problem and how you think it affects the different areas of studies.)

Paragraph 3: (Possible solutions.)

Paragraph 4: (Farewell)

Your friend, 

Name

Trouble With The IB?

Hey, man, how you doing? I hope you're fine. You know our moms talk like there was no tomorrow , right? Well your mom told her that you were having som issues with the ib in your school. You don't have to worry about it, I mean everybody has had trouble with the ib baccalaureate, it's hard, I should know about it. What you need to do is just get your study mode on and start doing the papers that they requiere for november, or may, because that what takes more time, take me for example, I left some of it for last minute and despite the fact that I completed them, it was harder because, at last all teacher have a lot to check, a lot of papers, so they may not have the time enough to check yours. So start working on those papers and start giving them to your teaches so they can check it and when the time comes you just give the final report, and you're done.

You should start with that so when the last few weeks before they are sent you would not be so stressed out and you can focus on your classes. You should give more attention to the classes you have the most trouble understanding, wich usually are: Chemistry, Biology, Math, Business and Managment, etc. But if Business and Managment is optional, unless you are going to study Business Administration, or something that is going to use Business and Managment choose it, because if you are not it's only going to be a waste of time, and let's be honest, you can waste your time on a better way. You can choose: Music, Drawing, etc. That is gonna teach something cool and probably that you are not going to use, but it could be a hobbie.

Now, let's get serious. What you really need to do to keep up with the standards and to not flunk your classes is the homework. Do the homework, even if it's really boring, actually you need to do it more if it's boring because for sure they examinators are going to ask you about that. If you do the homeworks you don't even have to study for the exams, man, all you would need is just a refresh on the subject and that's it. With your homeworks you will have almost all the points on your accumulated score, and the finals won't have that much weight over you. Just do this, and you will be fine, hope you do and hope you win.

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Travel Experiences

By: Trooper

I saw once an article that said "Travel can often have an impact on a young person´s life" and it is true. When you are young almost everything has an impact on your life, but some things can be healthy for you physically and mentally. Usually travelling with your family becomes a great experience in your young life.

My personal experience happens to be the first time I got in a plane. I was almost 11 years old, and I waited the whole year for this trip, ever since my parents told we were making it. Finally the vacations came and the travel was about to be made. The destination remained a secret, but my parents assured me the trip was going to be awesome, something we had never imagined, and something we were going to love, and they were right. One week before the trip, they told us where we were going, we were going to Orlando, Florida, and to have perfect ending, we were going to visit my uncles in Dallas, Texas. When they told me that, I was even more excited.

The day came, and with it the excitement and the thrill. It was early in the morning, and we had to go to the bus station so we could leave to El Salvador and then take an airplane from there and fly to Orlando. It was a long ride, around 5 hours, and not so sure, after all I was only 10 years old. But despite being so young of age, I remember everything just like it was yesterday. We had to wait for about 45 minutes on the airport. But they passed so slowly, the minutes were like hours. But they finally ended, and we got inside the plane. As we were taking off, I stared at the ground, and I got a little dizzy, it was funny.

We landed on Orlando, and a friend of my parents went to the airport to pick us up, that is when the fun started. We visited a lot of parks; we went to Disney World, to Universal Studios, to Islands of Adventures. There’s one memory that I remember perfectly, I was young so I couldn’t get on some rides, but there was one I really liked but it didn´t have turns or flips or any of that, it was just fast. My mom doesn’t like rollercoasters or any of that style, but we told her it was just a fun ride with no speeding and scary parts, and she bought it. When she got down she was a little pissed but she said it was fun.

Sadly we had to leave; it was our turn to visit our uncle. And it was really fun. He had a surprise that we never even thought about. He got us tickets to see an NBA´s game! Mavericks vs Jazz! It was so fun. It was absolutely mind blowing.

After the trip, my family became more united, and I think that it was the best souvenir we could take

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When you are young almost everything has an impacto(impact) on your life, but some things can be healthy for you fisically(physically) and mentally. Usually travel(travelling) with your family becomes a great experience in your young life.

My personal experience happens to be the first time I got in a plane. I was almost 11 years old, and I waited the whole year for this trip, ever since my parents told we were making it. Finally the vacations came and the travel was about to be made. The destination remained a secret, but my parents assure(assured) me the trip was going to be awesome, something we would(had) never imagine(imagined), and something we were going to love, and they were right. One weel(week) before the trip, they told us where we were going, we were going to Orlando, Florida, and to have a fluorish for an(perfect) end(ending), we were going to visit my uncles in Dallas, Texas. When the(they) told me that(,) i(I) was even more excited.

The day came, and with it the excitement and the thrill. It was early in the morning, (and) we had to go to the bus station so we could leave to El Salvador and then take an airplane from there and fly to Orlando. It was a long ride, around 5 hours, and not so sure, after all I was only 10 years old. But despite being so young of age, I remember everything just like it was yesterday. We had to wait for about 45 minutes on the airport. But they passed so slow(slowly), the minutes were like hours. But they finally ended, and we got inside the plane. As we were taking off(,) a(I) stared at the ground, and I got a little dizzy, it was funny.

We landed on Orlando, and a friend of my parents went to the airport to pick us up, that is when the fun started. We visited a lot of parks(,)(;) we went to Disney World, to Universal Studios, to Islands of Adventures. Theres(There’s) one memory that I remember perfectelly(perfectly), I was young so i(I) couldnt(couldn’t) get on some rides, but there was one i(I) really liked but (it) didnt(didn´t) have turns or flipps(flips) or any of that, it was just fast. My mom dont(doesn’t) like rollercoaster(rollercoasters) or any of that style, but we told her it was just a fun ride with no speeding and scary parts, and she bought it. When she got down she was a little pissed but she said it was fun.

Sadly we had to leave(,)(;) it was our turn to visit our uncle. And it was really fun(,)(.) he(He) had a surprise that we never even think(thought) about. He got us tickets to see an NBA´s game! Mavericks vs Jazz! It was so fun. It was abosolutely(absolutely) mind blowing.

After the trip, my family became more united, (and) I think that (it) was the best souvenir we could take.